BYU Illustration VA 451 Senior Portfolio
Nice use of warms and cools on the white bird. I didn't quite see the X's at first. Is there a way to make them more prominent? Maybe you could design the feathers somehow to look like X's.
I like the symbolism! The birds with the x's on them are about the same value as the water, so maybe give the birds more saturation and have the x's stand out more - I couldn't see them at first.
Nice contrast. Your whitest bird really reads well, it is easy to tell he is soaring above the brown birds. the colors also seem to be working nicely together. I don't get what this piece is trying to tell, though. basically I am trying to understand why the x's are on the brown birds' backs. Only when I read the description did it make sense. I might ask myself, "what kind of "x" would best brand someone as being doomed to everyday life?" maybe considering how to make the x's really communicate your point. It's a beautiful idea. Now that I've read the description I can really relate to your piece, it's beautiful! It might give that impact you are going for without the viewer needing any explanation with a little more work.
This is an interesting idea! I really like the way that you composed the birds, and the white bird is quite beautiful. I agree with Samantha, I think that designing the feathers to look like x's would be more interesting.
I really like how unique this idea is! I would like to see the 'flow' of the brown birds to be more intentional. Kind of like what Brett was telling us to make more of a direction and flow, to just push a little more, it just feels slightly stiff. Other than that, to me this is a really cool, interesting piece!! That white bird is beautiful!
Cool idea, I like birds. I actually hope to own a hunting eagle one day, to catch those rabbits running amuck through the desert hills.
I love the simplicity and the lovely color scheme of this piece :). I think the brown birds could be a little lighter so you can see them better. The water design is beautiful.
I love this! The value separation between the background birds and the white bird is really working. I love the way the white bird looks a little sharper as well. Maybe I would make the beak on the white bird a more saturated orange, to just really make it pop against the blue-green background. Really nice!
Your shapes and composition are lovely. I wonder, though if you could render the water so it feels more wet, the flow seems a little abstract right now.
I love the shapes of those little ducks!!!! Really pleasant to look at. My favorite part by far. I feel green and brown isn't the loveliest color combination but it's all good if that's what you like. Also the tangent of the doves upper wing with the top of the image seems off; if it was tilted to the right more it could reflect/fit nicely into the corner. But HEY such a great idea and work.
The birds have a ton of really good contrast! It's great. I didn't see the x's on the birds until I read what you said. It may be cool to make it a little more bright/orangish/saturated or something. You could even just make it look like a design on the feathers. Like dots or something. Super cool!
It took me a little while to figure out how your concept matched with the assignment, but overall the project has great contrast and I like the color scheme you chose. If there is any way to make the x's stand out a little more, I think that would help. Good job!
I like your concept and your shapes. Either the texture of the water or the saturation seems a little distracting.
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